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a jar of jae ([personal profile] jaebility) wrote2009-05-08 04:33 pm
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Another writing post

Found another helpful list of tips for writers! This one's Ten Mistakes Writers Don’t See (But Can Easily Fix When They Do) by Pat Holt. Holt gives detailed explanations for each of these sins; I'm just going to list them. The article's really interesting - Definitely Check it out.

1. Repeats
2. Flat writing
3. Empty adverbs (Oh man, I am definitely guilty of this one)
4. Phony dialogue
5. No-good suffixes
6. The "to be" words
7. Lists
8. Show, don't tell
9. Awkward phrasing
10. Commas

When I started writing in Yuffie's voice, I threw in a crapload of adverbs, since (in my interpretation of her) one of her habits is to exaggerate. Around that time I started to re-re-write "Fine Art," deliberately creating a new voice for Daisuke, and since they share some personality traits, I started using adverbs in his speech, too. Aaaand I was also writing in Rikku's POV, and she's a lot like Yuffie, so...

And now I can't stop! I use "actually" and "definitely" too often. Must attempt to curtail the habit.
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[personal profile] adalger 2009-05-09 12:59 am (UTC)(link)
404 Not Found :(
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[personal profile] nan 2009-05-09 01:36 am (UTC)(link)
Just take the " off the end of the url. :)
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[personal profile] nan 2009-05-09 01:35 am (UTC)(link)
I actually definitely use empty adverbs too much. ALL. THE. TIME.
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Writing post - Pat Holt

[personal profile] baggyeyes 2009-05-09 03:08 am (UTC)(link)
That's a very good article. Again, it reminds me of Stephen King's On Writing. I have The Elements of Style, a very thin little book. You'd have thought BY NOW I would have read the darn thing.

Interesting entries you've been making. Keep it up.


Oh, and...when am I going to see a story of your at [community profile] 310toyuma? It's dyin'!

[identity profile] kashiichan.livejournal.com 2009-05-10 02:28 am (UTC)(link)
You have an additional " in your URL that is making it not work, just so you know.

[identity profile] verdictlesslife.livejournal.com 2009-05-26 11:39 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks! Think it's fixed now.